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inactiveTopic Morning - A circular poem topic started 11/24/2006; 2:18:25 PM
last post 11/24/2006; 2:59:37 PM
user 19857 - Morning - A circular poem  blueArrow
11/24/2006; 2:18:25 PM (reads: 2794, responses: 1)
Morning - A circular poem

Morning. Once again.
Light shines through
blinding spaces
surrounded by that
semi-dim morning grayness.
At least the blinds are closed.
Think about the day,
about time,
about the limits of time,
the shortness of the day
and your capabilities.
Try to go back to sleep.
30 seconds pass
and it has officially begun.
Might as well start,
by eating,
sustaining life,
get up to eat.
Find a letter,
A smile,
A friend?
The day goes by,
with her in mind,
Anything can happen.
Is she there, with you?
Laughing, smiling.
Soon,
Morning. Once again.

Posted by 19857 on 11/24/06; 2:18:25 PM from the dept.

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user 24926 - Re: Morning - A circular poem  blueArrow
11/24/2006; 2:59:37 PM (reads: 1458, responses: 0)
I love the "light shines through / blinding spaces" line. Created a real nice image.
Only critique - It might be best not to repeat time twice in a row at the end of the line.
Great poem, nice mood.

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