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topic started 11/24/2006; 2:58:06 PM
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 25433 - The Perfect Wrong Choice 
11/24/2006; 2:58:06 PM (reads: 2856, responses:
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Crushed by a memory
Devoured by a fantasy
My finger trembles on the trigger
Fighting for strength that doesn't exist
The infatuation clouds a misty mind
Can I have him once more?
Climb out of the boundaries
Break the rope of morals that keeps me secure
Spontanious, delicious, wrong
I can't turn away
Not yet.
Eyelids sliced by invisible tears
Trapped in an unholy decision
Anchored only by friendships
Their love healing my pain
Making it bearable to be
Crushed by a memory
Devoured by a fantasy
On the verge of taking a chance
Spontanious, delicious, yet brutally wrong.
Posted by 25433 on 11/24/06; 2:58:06 PM
from the dept.
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24926 - Re: The Perfect Wrong Choice
11/24/2006; 3:03:25 PM (reads: 1479, responses:
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Your first line was really power - it smacked me in the face like a brick and got my attention. ^^ Very powerful.
My favorite lines:
"My finger trembles on the trigger"
"The infatuation clouds a misty mind"
"Break the rope of morals that keeps me secure"
Actually, I like a lot of the lines in the poem. "Anchored" - great image
Oh, and "Eyelids sliced by invisible tears" - Loved that one.
Great poem! I really enjoyed reading it.
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