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inactiveTopic The Dog topic started 11/24/2006; 3:06:41 PM
last post 12/4/2006; 1:22:28 PM
user 19857 - The Dog  blueArrow
11/24/2006; 3:06:41 PM (reads: 2844, responses: 1)
The Dog

The Dog

Sunlight streams through his
happy eyes,
as he observes the scene,
Quietly.

A furry creature,
guarding, on duty
as they mingled, laughed,
and danced.

He was the head of the family,
he knew that.

Tucking his paws under his chest,
So professionaly,
much like he had seen the cat do
so many times before.

The guitar continues to sing,
and skirts swirl on,
The water laps up against
his small black nose.

"The things I witness"
he thinks fondly,
He loves his job.

Posted by 19857 on 11/24/06; 3:06:41 PM from the dept.

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user 24926 - Re: The Dog  blueArrow
12/4/2006; 1:22:28 PM (reads: 1459, responses: 0)
I like the way you  brought canine aspects into the poem, like comparing himself to the cat. That was cute. "The skirts swirl on" created a nice image in my head. The last line ties it up nicely, and I like the way you make him see it as a job, as if he were way more than just a pet.

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