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topic started 11/30/2006; 9:34:43 AM
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 12090 - In the Heat of the Moment 
11/30/2006; 9:34:43 AM (reads: 2758, responses:
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In the Heat of the Moment
Passionate, Explosive
the flame that never dies
Sadistic, Corrosive
pleasure sated cries
Loving, Caring
protective watchful sighs
Soothing, Daring
wont ever say goodbyes
Flowering, Blooming
a blossom for the skies
Towering, Dooming
like a spider it webs lies
Momentous, Craved
never asking why?
Stupendous, Grave
breaking many ties
Heated, Thoughtful
every thought is wry
Scary, Fraught full
never want to leave your side
In the Heat of the Moment...
Posted by 12090 on 11/30/06; 9:34:43 AM
from the Andrew dept.
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12090 - Re: In the Heat of the Moment
11/30/2006; 9:42:44 AM (reads: 1440, responses:
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Damn!
after reading my own poem I realize that two words are miss spelled.
SAITED in line 4 should be SATED
FRAUTFUL in line 18 should be FRAUGHT FULL
=)
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Cam - Re: In the Heat of the Moment
11/30/2006; 3:30:31 PM (reads: 1440, responses:
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Hi Andrew,
I'm the Blogadmin for Yukon schools. In the future I would suggest not using the Release button on your
stories. When you Release them it moves them up the editorial chain and
only your teacher can then edit. You don't really need to use Release on this
kind of a blog. Unfortunately there is no way to undo it once you have. I will correct those words for you.
Cam
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24926 - Re: In the Heat of the Moment
12/4/2006; 12:28:50 PM (reads: 1424, responses:
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Wow, the imagery is amazing and the mood is incredibly involving. I absolutely love this poem! No critique coming from me. ^^
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