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inactiveTopic descriptive paragraphs topic started 11/27/2006; 11:46:30 AM
last post 12/5/2006; 11:56:06 AM
user 23030 - descriptive paragraphs  blueArrow
11/27/2006; 11:46:30 AM (reads: 15721, responses: 1)
descriptive paragraphs

                Gun Shot
                By: Cole
  I woke up drowsy,my head was throbbing and I was blind for a couple of hours. Once I could see, I realized I was in a cabin. It was cold and there was no wood in the stove. I got up and started to look around. BANG! There was a gun shot. The bullet hit me.

  The pain was in my leg. When I heard the gun shot it sounded like a wild animal shrieking in the night. Everything was slow-mo, I thought about nothing but when the bullet hit me I thought that I could have dodged it. The blood was a waterfall draining out of my leg. Eventually, it stopped. BANG! Another gun shot.

  The bullet came towards me again. Before it hit me, I looked at where it came from, the right window. I saw no one. The bullet hit me in the same leg. In addition to the second bullet in my leg. My leg started to bleed from the second hole and got numb. Meanwhile, I thought “who would do this to me?” I got up found something sharp and cut my sleeve off from my shirt and bandaged across my leg,therefore it would stop the bleeding. In the same way, like a dam. After it stopped bleeding,I adjusted the bandage and ran as fast as I could out of that place on one leg.

               The End!


Posted by 23030 on 12/4/06; 11:54:50 AM from the Cole dept.

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user 23027 - Re: descriptive paragraphs  blueArrow
12/5/2006; 11:56:06 AM (reads: 4029, responses: 0)
Very good!!!!!

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